<Euthanasia drugs>
Euthanasia does not respect life. There are three reasons why I oppose Euthanasia. First of all, human life is noble and dignified, but our country has a high suicide rate. If the Korea is allowing Euthanasia, this situation bring up the terrible result of suicide rate. As a result, Euthanasia ignore respect of life. First reason is included in ‘passive Euthanasia’. 'Passive euthanasia' stop the medical care which helping life extension. For example, Euthanasia is determinded by willingness of individuals. If a patient ,who has no possibility selected the comfortable death, and he/she wants to care without pain during medical management, doctors help the dead of patient. These action allows the patient dead without pain. Next case is another example in army. During the war, a commander of the military shoot his soldiers ,who can not revive. Second, In korea, our constitution does not permit to Euthanasia. And then, I agree with Korea Constitution. If others are helping Euthanasia, it is assisted suicide. In other words, these action means that agree to murder by Euthanasia. Therefore, it could be punished in Korea. Actually, In 1997, a patient ,who used a respirator was died in 'baramae' hospital lacated in seoul. Because, his wife requested to hospital for removing her husband's respirator. After that, his younger brother reported to court with the fact that his older brother died by them. As a result, they were arrested on a accused of murder.This picture is showing the result about same type incident.
<Accident of Euthanasia>
Third, the stray dogs and cats were euthanized in order to disposing. However, some hospitals are euthanized without anesthetic using a muscle relaxant. This management causes the animals died with big pain. Thus, terrible cases are require strict management of the laws. Euthanasia controversy have existed so far. In conclusion, we need to know that a precious life and hope is removed by Euthanasia.
Hello Inyoung,
답글삭제I read your writing well. It was very interesting topic. I found something to be complemented in your paragraph when I think. First of all, footnotes are necessary. I picked up cellphone dictionary as soon as I saw your title. It is applied to other words like factitious, dignity, and resuscitation, too. Second, I couldn’t detect your topic sentence. I understand your opinion, but it is not revealed certainly. Furthermore, I couldn't know your intent about topic until I read middle phase of paragraph. Finally, there are no examples to support your reasons. If you don't put reliable examples, it is hard for your opinion to be persuasive to many readers.
Cheer up,
Seyoung
Hello Inyoung,
답글삭제I also had an idea of writing euthanasia as my writing topic. I think this topic is forever a big issue for people around the world. I can see that you have disagreed with the topic but, it will be better to state your opinion clearly, in the beginning of the paragraph. Thus, reader can have a better idea of what you think about the topic. Also, other than the picture, you need to use the citation for each sources you have used. Also, for the last paragraph, try to use different word other than the word, ‘And’. If you elaborate more about the ideas, it will be a perfect final assignment. Overall, it was informative and clear!
Have a nice day,
Minji
Hi Inyoung,
답글삭제Your paragraph has an interesting issue. Euthanasia is dealt with a topic for many discussions. I agree with your opinion to a certain extent. I think passive euthanasia should permit when it is patient's will. Anyway, I think most of writing contents are made of explanation of euthanasia, so you'd better to reduce the explanation and add more reasons and examples to prove your opinion. Also, it would be better to add citations.
Best wishes,
Sojin
Hi Inyoung,
답글삭제I think the serious patient should be allowed to die. In other words, euthanasia should be allowed. People have the right to decide their life, and we need to respect their decision. Of course, I do not think euthanasia must be allowed. Each human has their connection, so we should respect their (families, friends, etc.) thought. In addition, I want to tell you something. It is not essential, but you don't write your topic on first sentence. I think, it will be a good writing if you do this. Also, you used difficult words, but you did not write footnotes. Actually, I didn’t know what means euthanasia, so I used dictionary. Anyway, I enjoy your writing.
Have a nice day,
Jaekyoung
Hi Inyoung,
답글삭제Wow! You chose the super heavy controversial issue that never ends:) Still, I like that you are very enthusiastic about opposing euthanasia with clear supports. However, while reading your paragraph, I couldn't understand what 'life slight tendency' means until I found the description in Korean. I know what you are trying to say about the issue overall, but if you slightly change your sentence structures, then the quality of your paragraph would be much better for sure. For example, instead of using life slight tendency, euthanasia should be opposed because it disrespects life. Hope this is helpful to enhance quality of your work!
Best wishes,
June